Friday, October 1, 2010
My most memorable person
My most memorable person is my cousin. I hate him so much. He liked to do dangerous things.One time he spill hot water on his pets and kill them with fireworks. He doesn't like to wear clothes and pants. He is always naked at home, so I always stay away from him. He is my memorable person, because he is always doing something funny and silly. One time he ran home because a lot of dogs were chasing him, he stole something from neighbor and he bit by the house dog. Sometimes he do something that almost harm something. He played fireworks and nearly blew up the car, he fed the dog chocolate, he killed my pet. When he done something bad, I hope he would disappear, when he does something funny, I hope people will laugh at him.
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He liked to do dangerous things (He still likes to do them, so this is in present tense)
ReplyDeleteOne time he spill hot water on his pets and kill them with fireworks (This is something that is finished, and in the past, so make the verbs past tense)
he stole something from (a) neighbor and he bit (was bitten) by the house dog. (what is a house dog?)
Sometimes he do something that almost harm something (rewrite this and make sure it has 'he does' in it, not 'he do')
When he done something bad (does)
Correct and pass